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My Strugle

Author: DrewDilla
ASL Info:    25/M/Chicago
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Words: 118
Class/Type: Lyrics /Serious
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Just explaining my self.

My Strugle

Why do girls say they hate me?
Why don’t they just date me?
No they just classify/rate me.
If only they’d try n mate me.

Then they might see to turn to me.
N starts to see how they’d yearn for me.
But they go and n they burn me
N don’t take time to learn me

Andrew is the real me. Do ya feel me?
Strong as steel is me. God healed me.

DrewDilla is my exposed alias u see me.
That name makes me unload u see me.
Just before I explode you’ll be told u see me.
N I’ll do it Big N Bold n grab a hold u see me.

Submitted on 2007-02-01 16:57:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  lol...kool one...gave me a smile:)
| Posted on 2008-01-02 00:00:00 | by N0shin | [ Reply to This ]
  Not Bad at all Drew
The rhymes in this write flowed easily and what I really liked is how every line of the last stanza ended in U SEE
That shows you are in control of yourself and your emotions and will not let anything stop you from moving forward
I too my Friend am exactly that way myself
For you see I also was healed Thanks Too The Love Of God and delivered a new life with new meaning
The Old Ron was suicidal and a huge drug addict
I Pray you stay strong Drew
The secret is to remain Positive and give Praise to The One Up Above who has healed you from your sadness and delivered a new life with new meaning
I will be Praying for you My Friend
God Bless
| Posted on 2007-02-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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