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    dots Submission Name: My Strugledots
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    Author: DrewDilla
    ASL Info:    25/M/Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 131/196/51
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1350
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       Just explaining my self.


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    dotsMy Strugledots
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    Why do girls say they hate me?
    Why don’t they just date me?
    No they just classify/rate me.
    If only they’d try n mate me.

    Then they might see to turn to me.
    N starts to see how they’d yearn for me.
    But they go and n they burn me
    N don’t take time to learn me

    Andrew is the real me. Do ya feel me?
    Strong as steel is me. God healed me.

    DrewDilla is my exposed alias u see me.
    That name makes me unload u see me.
    Just before I explode you’ll be told u see me.
    N I’ll do it Big N Bold n grab a hold u see me.




    Submitted on 2007-02-01 16:57:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lol...kool one...gave me a smile:)
    | Posted on 2008-01-02 00:00:00 | by N0shin | [ Reply to This ]
      Not Bad at all Drew
    The rhymes in this write flowed easily and what I really liked is how every line of the last stanza ended in U SEE
    That shows you are in control of yourself and your emotions and will not let anything stop you from moving forward
    I too my Friend am exactly that way myself
    For you see I also was healed Thanks Too The Love Of God and delivered a new life with new meaning
    The Old Ron was suicidal and a huge drug addict
    I Pray you stay strong Drew
    The secret is to remain Positive and give Praise to The One Up Above who has healed you from your sadness and delivered a new life with new meaning
    I will be Praying for you My Friend
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-02-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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