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    dots Submission Name: the perfect lassdots
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    Author: williamwallace7
    ASL Info:    18/male/california
    Elite Ratio:    1.1 - 8/5/9
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    your hair smells like the sea
    your eyes are daggers that pierce me
    your voice is like the rain on a gloomy day
    your mouth is as sun shines in its powerful wy
    your breast are as smooth glades of grass
    it seems in every way you are a perfect lass
    i will kill die and live for you in all
    your my lover friend its to you whom i call




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