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    dots Submission Name: Icy Waterdots

    Author: DeathTone
    ASL Info:    32 / Male / United States
    Elite Ratio:    5.54 - 81/55/30
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Hey i dont know what i was thinking when i wrote this. but i hope it is enjoyed and the meaning that i wanted to get out, actually gets out.

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    dotsIcy Waterdots

    I close my eyes when I get scared
    And run away from what I see
    It makes me curl up into a ball and cry
    Each time I look in the mirror and see me

    I never understood how I made it this far
    Because life has been hard take in
    So I stare at my self and scream
    As the image I see looks back and grins

    Itís hard to deal with this kind of stress
    When you know you canít succeed
    The touchier keeps the pain consistently flowing
    While being scared only feeds the need

    When it took hold of me I tried to fight
    Itsí strength was too powerful for me to contain
    I was numb like being tossed in Icy Waters learning how to swim
    So I grabbed the coldness by the handle to relive my pain

    Submitted on 2007-02-02 12:59:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well, first, its nicely written. a lot of feeling went into this. its all fear and confusion, or perhaps frustration, and i can relate to that at the moment.
    one thing confused me...
    'The touchier keeps the pain consistently flowing'
    i didnt understand this line, perhaps i'm just being dense, but i couldn't make sense of it.

    'So I stare at my self and scream
    As the image I see looks back and grins'
    these lines are excellent, i feel like this a lot. this piece is so fitting to me personally at the moment. i hope you have conquered whatever it was that inspired this piece.
    guess we have to stand up and face our fears, no good hiding...they always find us.
    i enjoyed this piece. you are very deep, and should keep expressing your feelings this way.
    | Posted on 2007-02-03 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]

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