Description: Hey i dont know what i was thinking when i wrote this. but i hope it is enjoyed and the meaning that i wanted to get out, actually gets out.
Icy Water -------------------------------------------
I close my eyes when I get scared
And run away from what I see
It makes me curl up into a ball and cry
Each time I look in the mirror and see me
I never understood how I made it this far
Because life has been hard take in
So I stare at my self and scream
As the image I see looks back and grins
It’s hard to deal with this kind of stress
When you know you can’t succeed
The touchier keeps the pain consistently flowing
While being scared only feeds the need
When it took hold of me I tried to fight
Its’ strength was too powerful for me to contain
I was numb like being tossed in Icy Waters learning how to swim
So I grabbed the coldness by the handle to relive my pain
well, first, its nicely written. a lot of feeling went into this. its all fear and confusion, or perhaps frustration, and i can relate to that at the moment.
one thing confused me...
'The touchier keeps the pain consistently flowing'
i didnt understand this line, perhaps i'm just being dense, but i couldn't make sense of it.
'So I stare at my self and scream
As the image I see looks back and grins'
these lines are excellent, i feel like this a lot. this piece is so fitting to me personally at the moment. i hope you have conquered whatever it was that inspired this piece.
guess we have to stand up and face our fears, no good hiding...they always find us.
i enjoyed this piece. you are very deep, and should keep expressing your feelings this way.
michelle
Submission Name: Icy Water
