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    dots Submission Name: Irresponsibledots
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    Author: Liv2LoveThePain
    ASL Info:    19 - F - Philly
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 1527/1515/256
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsIrresponsibledots
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    The sunlight will die on it's own
    just when you think you're invincible.
    Maybe nothing is meant to be.
    Maybe we're both irresponsible.

    Lets give failure another chance.
    It wears your face better than I do.
    I'll pull you deeper through my veins
    until carnivals of light turn blue.

    Rollercoasters fall from their tracks,
    sparking every laugh on the way down.
    Cotton candy rots in your mouth
    while you dress to blend in with the clowns.

    Shadowed by unwanted children,
    like a cult with balloons in their hands,
    you walk through the midnight debris
    as they follow your selfish demands.

    Because sunlight died on its own,
    you embrace what you don't want to be,
    and the hole where your heart once was
    is now the ugliest part of me.




    Submitted on 2007-02-02 13:07:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmm this is interesting I dont know how to read this one...I mean I read it butI cant make heads or tails of it. I seem so out of it lately.

    Help Me Understand,
    Jay
    | Posted on 2007-02-03 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]


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