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    dots Submission Name: Table sidedots
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    Author: jsoulgirl
    ASL Info:    18/F/iowa
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 24/22/9
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       lost lover


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    dotsTable sidedots
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    From August to December,
    I think about the days when I would have done anything to satisfy you.
    Now I just wish that it would just all go away!
    The day dreamer in me says that it could still be you and I,
    But I never see it as same
    I listen to music of your heart wondering if it the loneness that I felt.
    This overcoming chest pain that makes me say,
    Dam baby I wish I could make it go away.

    As days progress I lose my self in thoughts,
    Of a city so absent from the essence of me.
    Struggling with the fact I am not what I appear to be.
    So I don't know how much longer this fabrication,
    Can co- exist with the mortal lying within.





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