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    dots Submission Name: Frosty From Wendy'sdots
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    Author: Imaginth
    Elite Ratio:    5.18 - 43/50/19
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Okay, I was eating a Frosty from Wendy's and I was having anger issues obviously with my mother. Basically I was trying to get the point off that I hate my mother and really enjoy my Frosty.


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    dotsFrosty From Wendy'sdots
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    I sit here in this computer chair,
    the cool Frosty on my bottom lip.
    Yet, here I sit, my eyes in a glare,
    as my world sinks like a ship.

    A coke-addicted woman had given birth,
    to a pitiful and pathetic and putrid person.
    My screams echo out to be put into earth,
    I wish to know why my pain continues to worsen.

    Everyday I imagine,
    why I had to be her child.
    Maybe out there I had a twin,
    and she was never reviled.

    We could trade lives with another,
    if but only for a single day.
    I could be free of my mother,
    and be on my life's way.

    So here I sit in this room,
    eating my Frosty with delight.
    If only I was never in her womb,
    maybe my anger would never ignite.




    Submitted on 2007-02-02 14:35:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      That was morbid.
    | Posted on 2007-08-16 00:00:00 | by Kiddo | [ Reply to This ]
      That was morbid.
    | Posted on 2007-08-16 00:00:00 | by Kiddo | [ Reply to This ]
      My mom is just like this, Mage.
    She's a [censored] isn't she? Just like my mom. My mom doesn't have enough time to spend with me. Instead, she's out there trying to get rich. She's never home...And even though I hate her, I miss her, too.
    Well, this world isn't perfect. Nor our parents. It sucks, but I find a way around it.
    But anyway, I really like this piece. It shows how you feel. Just let it out. Feel angry. That's how I get my poetry done. ^-^
    -Beth
    | Posted on 2007-06-21 00:00:00 | by crimson_panda | [ Reply to This ]
      this is pretty sad actually... i'm not sure what to say except good write, you got your points across...
    zd
    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by zen-dog | [ Reply to This ]
      Well first, I don't want to say that I doubt your mother is that bad, but I won't assume anything because I have no idea. But it made me sad that you and your mother do not have a good relationship. The reason that I decided to read this was because I love Frosty's and more importantly Wendy's is my second home. So I congratulate you on your tribute to the Frosty. Now when you say coke-addicted, it can be taken two ways, and only as the drink because of the fast-food theme behind this.
    | Posted on 2007-02-02 00:00:00 | by Dimension_X | [ Reply to This ]


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