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    dots Submission Name: Years from now.dots
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    Author: Herrick
    ASL Info:    20/M/AL
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 20/29/11
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 987
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       Letter from today, Read in the Future. Not the greatest, but I don't care.


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    dotsYears from now.dots
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    I found something
    From long ago.
    It's really cool
    But rather old.

    I opened it
    And held it up.
    It's mostly white
    With some blue.

    I found something
    On this objet.
    Little black makings,
    Covered the white;
    Covered the Blue.

    Writing.
    Sloppy.
    Fun.

    I cleared the dust
    And read the letter.
    It's really old
    But rather cool.

    The letter said:
    I love you, Chris...
    Yours Forever,
    Jessie Thomas Fowers

    I smiled at this.
    My last name
    Added to her own.
    We weren't married.

    Together.
    Binded.
    Happy.

    I thought to myself
    Of so long ago
    When She handed me this
    Into my open mouth.

    I cried inside.
    I missed high school.
    The fun that we had.
    We had only each other.

    I looked to my left
    Laying in bed.
    She looked up
    From behind her book.

    Eyes.
    Lips.
    So Soft.

    Beautiful Eyes
    On a beautiful Face.
    Thats really cool
    But rather old

    They Widened
    As did her mouth
    Her arms slid around me
    And pulled me closer.

    I said to her
    "Forever Yours
    I love you
    Jessie Thomas Fowers."




    Submitted on 2007-02-02 14:46:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmmm. Love.

    I liked the peice.
    I liked the exchange of old and Cool.

    I feel almost like I stumbled into someones Very Private moment.

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-07-27 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a really sweet poem... and seeing that the story is happening now is so cute. i hope you two end up happy!
    thanks for sharing
    ali
    | Posted on 2007-02-02 00:00:00 | by Ali Marie | [ Reply to This ]
      Awwwwwww. Yay. When did you write this? It was wonderful and it made me smile really big. Espically the part about me handing the note to you in your open mouth. I told you that you liked it when I did that. I liked the part about how I signed it like that but we weren't married...
    I smiled at this.
    My last name
    Added to her own.
    We weren't married.

    Together.
    Binded.
    Happy.

    That part made me smile. A lot. And my writing is not sloppy. :P. I love you, Chris. This poem was beautiful. Perfect and completely unexpected. I love you.
    | Posted on 2007-02-02 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      awe this is so cute! i love it!
    nice flow, great poem.
    Write on,
    Lanna
    | Posted on 2007-02-02 00:00:00 | by EmeRalDEyeZ5491 | [ Reply to This ]


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