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    dots Submission Name: When I'm Alonedots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       Just some thoughts about what I go through everyday.


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    dotsWhen I'm Alonedots
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    When silence becomes,
    My one begotten friend,
    And my pains' sum,
    Doesn't seem to have an end,
    That's when I feel alone,
    In my own zone,
    Where being human,
    Is felt to the bone,
    And my crazy thoughts,
    At home,
    Is where birth to my pain,
    Evolves from.

    When I'm alone,
    I try to carry on,
    With my struggle,
    Eventhough,
    I'm no longer a part of myself,
    Instead I become,
    The biggest of my troubles.




    Submitted on 2007-02-02 17:40:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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