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    dots Submission Name: Burial Mound Childrendots
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    Author: Vasudeva
    ASL Info:    43/M/irrelevant
    Elite Ratio:    5.12 - 24/27/23
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       As a kid, I ran away from home. I found a mound in a field in some woods. I thought it was an Indian burial mound. So I left some toys for any Indian child who might be buried there. But then thought better of disturbing the site, but it was too late...I always had such a rich imagination. My life seemed to take a nosedive after and I attributed it to that. I was probably about 10 at the "fateful" time.
    (Yes I was a weird kid)...lol


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    dotsBurial Mound Childrendots
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    Maybe it was all that fateful day?
    I've tried to explain.

    My luck reversed,
    Was it from that day?

    I was just a child, like you were once.
    I didn't mean to disturb your burial space!

    I left my toys for the children.
    so they could play.

    I wanted them to be happy.
    Can you forgive me?

    Please release any curse
    And let a little good come my way ?




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