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    dots Submission Name: Lonely to Lovelydots
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    Author: dx10687
    ASL Info:    22 / M / IA
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 13/19/18
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 717
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1056



    Description:
       A song about me and how i feel with my current gf hilary


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    dotsLonely to Lovelydots
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    When we first started talking
    I thought you seemed nice
    And now that I have met you
    I know you are wonderful

    I was fine with being alone
    Until I met you cuz
    Now my heart grows fonder
    Every time we are apart

    When we first met
    I was so nervous but now
    Just being with you is
    Oh so wonderful because

    I was fine with being alone
    Until I met you cuz
    Now my heart grows fonder
    Every time we are apart

    I love being around you
    Because I can completely act
    Like myself and I know that
    You are fine with it

    I was fine with being alone
    Until I met you cuz
    Now my heart grows fonder
    Every time we are apart

    The way I feel inside
    Is so unexplainable
    But I know you feel
    Exactly the same way

    I was fine with being alone
    Until I met you cuz
    Now my heart grows fonder
    Every time we are apart




    Submitted on 2007-02-03 01:49:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I felt where u were tryin to go with the piece. I think that the repitition took away from it. Maybe once in the beginning a nd once in the end and fill in the other stanzas with more. Good concept.
    | Posted on 2007-02-11 00:00:00 | by Tischpeachez | [ Reply to This ]


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