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    dots Submission Name: For youdots
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    Author: just an angel
    ASL Info:    17/F/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 95/109/59
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 949
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    dotsFor youdots
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    You came just in time
    When I needed you most
    Amazing you are,
    My heart's true host

    The timing was perfect
    I still don't understand
    Fate must be playing
    A brand new hand

    The day before you
    I had given up hope
    I was willing to hand
    True love its rope

    Heartache and failure
    Would lag at my side
    But the day you came
    I waved them good-bye

    I was nervous at first
    Because I couldn't believe
    That you wanted me with you
    I was afraid you'd leave

    But you relieved my worries
    And eased my fears
    On that one night
    When you kissed my tears

    I could no longer deny
    How I truly felt
    I had to tell you
    Before I could melt

    You said you loved me
    But I was afraid to admit
    That somehow I felt the same
    But I had a fear to commit

    Now it's ok to say
    That I love you too
    I guess all there's left to say
    Is thank you




    Submitted on 2007-02-03 11:40:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I won't go as far as saying <Amazing> <Incredible> etc,but this poem is certainly a nice read.It's quite simple and straightforward therefore easy to relate to for the reader.Some of the rhymes do seem to be a tad forced and at times it's a little too bland to be unique but like I said it's a pleasant read.The ending is a bit cheesy though!
    Cheers
    A.C
    | Posted on 2007-02-03 00:00:00 | by Asakura Cowboy | [ Reply to This ]
      Amazing, incredible. I loved it. It touched me deeply. I have these same feelings right now, and it was like you stole them right out of my heart's vault. I especially liked the ending, simple, but it left an impact too. Thank you for the fantastic read
    | Posted on 2007-02-03 00:00:00 | by roses | [ Reply to This ]


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