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    dots Submission Name: my curedots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 505
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 562



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       once again i have gotten back to to sopngwriting. not the greatest and still unfinished. i like it though. not as good as the one i have yet to post though.


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    dotsmy curedots
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    how is it i'm so in love with you
    how is it that our love is so true
    a miracle beyond reality
    a never ending magick fantasy
    i know when i look into your eyes
    i see a love that cannot be diguised
    a memory that i will never trade
    a love that i know will not fade

    i know that when i'm with you
    our love is pure
    a day when you are with me
    could be my cure
    and when you are beside me
    my heart beats fast
    i can see that our love
    will always last




    Submitted on 2007-02-03 13:22:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The words in this are pretty powerful, despite the use of a short diction.
    You get straight to the point.
    You should send the lyrics off to a singer, or a band or something.
    I like the rhyming scheme, it gives it that extra bit of a rythm,


    P.s, I don't actually like My Chemical Romance, my Dad bought me the T-Shirt, it was a nice thing for him to do, so I figured I'd wear it =P. lol. Besides I Like the art on the front of it, and that's one of the only pictures that makes me look good. lol.

    | Posted on 2007-06-13 00:00:00 | by Roseyness | [ Reply to This ]
      hey hi long time this was short and simple and has a nice meaning
    are you going to add to it you could take it onward but it is good as it is

    sandman
    | Posted on 2007-02-05 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the rhythm of this.
    I can hear it being sung.
    Very nice job.
    | Posted on 2007-02-03 00:00:00 | by wovenwords | [ Reply to This ]


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