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    Author: Mr.Ordinary
    ASL Info:    21/M/Navy
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 64/102/41
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       written off the top of my hea in 5 or less minutes (2-3-07)


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    some days found ,
    some days are lost,
    lost i am,
    in a world of green and grey
    i have no feelings left at all
    and yet i feel
    everything big and small




    Submitted on 2007-02-03 16:59:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is short sweet and to the point. I like it a lot. Sometimes the most complex ideas can be expressed in a few sentences or less, and i know just about anyone could connect with this
    | Posted on 2007-03-19 00:00:00 | by silentpoison | [ Reply to This ]
      my favorite way to write is to let it all go to the page then go through and pull the juicy stuff. Good concept, keep it spontaneous
    | Posted on 2007-02-11 00:00:00 | by tirebiter24 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like you coolness
    | Posted on 2007-02-03 00:00:00 | by DonkeyMan | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the simplicity... try to make it longer just random train of thought seems to work for you.
    good job.
    ali
    | Posted on 2007-02-03 00:00:00 | by Ali Marie | [ Reply to This ]


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