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    dots Submission Name: A Great Literary Noveldots

    Author: EmpathicAya
    ASL Info:    13+8/unMale/Your Mind
    Elite Ratio:    7.31 - 700/456/109
    Words: 25
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This was my first project for my Creative Writing Class. If you have read "The Red Wheel Barrow" by William Carlos Williams, it was to be written the same style about something you depend upon. Books take me to a special place. I share with you.
    Be at peace,

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    dotsA Great Literary Noveldots

    so much depends
    a great literary
    folded by ancient
    on the brown

    Submitted on 2007-02-03 23:40:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Short and to the point, and I love it! Books are great... I'd be so lost without them. This was really excellent. Now I want to write a poem about a book - lol - you're giving me too many ideas... my muse is apparently hungry tonight :)

    Wonderful work, dear!

    Cheers and God bless,

    | Posted on 2007-02-17 00:00:00 | by Mandi Gayle | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha, this was awesome--precise in thought and execution which I'll always admire. I guess it was the phrase "folded by ancient creases" which made this resonate--also, the way you lineated this makes this even more apparent, visually-speaking.

    And yeah, I've read that William Carlos Williams poem you mentioned in your description--he was a proponent of re-enjambing poems over and over I think, to give more thought and stress to particular words, which you've done here with the placement of three singular words. I think you did pretty well here to emulate the same reasoning.

    Nicely done.

    | Posted on 2007-02-11 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the way you've broken the lines down and made it very short and to the point.
    Mike's right it says so much for so few short lines.

    I love the way books can set you aside from your day to day and place you in a whole other world...always a joy when a good book gets better.
    I have a few that I could read again and again and never tire of them, not to mention that fact they seem to be better with every read...this piece speaks of those points within a good book
    and I like that

    Good job
    | Posted on 2007-02-05 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      So short yet says so much. reading can take you somewhere else and taht escape is cherished. Good job.

    | Posted on 2007-02-04 00:00:00 | by fryte | [ Reply to This ]

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