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    dots Submission Name: Waiting To Be Founddots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    57/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2777/1297/258
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 722
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       At John Paul's request, a journal revamped as a submission.


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    dotsWaiting To Be Founddots
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    some are born
    exquisite writers
    with fine pedigrees

    while the rest of us
    labor to craft
    jewels from stone

    and wood, weaving
    gold from common cloth
    as kings caress

    the muse in absentia
    propelled by whispered promise
    in sceptered chariots

    others brush
    the slender lips
    of simpler lovers

    collecting kernels
    of the whirling
    fields of wheat




    Submitted on 2007-02-04 13:51:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I'm glad you posted this as a poem, Bill.

    The logic is simple but it's artistically rendered.

    while the rest of us
    labor to craft
    jewels from stone

    and wood, weaving
    gold from common cloth

    &

    others brush
    the slender lips
    of simpler lovers


    I loved how these lines, in particular, complimented the ones that came before them.

    Beautifully balanced piece imo.

    DB
    | Posted on 2007-02-09 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm the 35th viewer and I see you still have no comments... hrm, what's up with that?

    Do you really think some people are born with a particular gift? Sure, perhaps, but it's passion which equates to hard work and diligence over talent any day in my opinion. I mean, someone was talking to me about this the other day, and that's what I said: that the reason we have a particular 'talent' is because it's a calling and a life-decision that will never be anything otherwise. To reject it would mean certain soul-annihilation... at least, to me anyhow.

    And, you know, if you crush coal long enough, it'll turn to diamonds eventually... it takes a while, but eventually...

    Peace,

    Jase

    | Posted on 2007-02-08 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]


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