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    dots Submission Name: Anymoredots
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    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAnymoredots
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    i know no one knows im alive
    buts thats fine cause no one will know im dead
    What do I have to say, I have enough of this
    Not even my closest friends know I exist

    Im a shadow people see through
    and its my life and im through

    Wont be able to take your advice
    when you tell me to grow up
    Times up on this life
    times up times up

    There is no one 'only one who knows me' anymore
    and there is no finding that one anymore

    You call it giving up
    I call it living not
    whats the difference
    either way Ive failed
    but I dont realy`care
    my conscience wont be here anymore




    Submitted on 2007-02-04 21:48:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The poem, was well written, but very sad.

    It did lack punctuation.

    The flow of the poem was good as well.

    Kind regards
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    | Posted on 2007-02-06 00:00:00 | by bornx2000 | [ Reply to This ]


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