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Author:	Localfreak
ASL Info:	37, Maybe, Here
Elite Ratio:	5.37 - 131/123/76
Words:	157

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	804
Average Vote:	5.0000
Bytes:	1056

Description:
Goodbye!
Just this second finished this.
I know I'm relatively wierd but I hope I'm not the only one who understands.
Hello!

Paradox

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Wishing that today would end,
But could never wish to leave
Understanding the way it was without
Knowing what will come
Demonise a faith to hide,
Your insecurities
Following a path
Of liars

Coldness of the night
Not letting in the wind
Darkness of the light
Illuminating
Tears, before a prayer to one,
Whom still resides below
Despair of what will be
Following

Curtsied to those standing tall
With unshed blown contempt
Described a life of constant war
Where not a blow was spent
And sought an interest in a course
A course where none shall go
To scream inside a raucous
Silence

Never was the future held
Nor history made through sight
Never shall the whole re-mend
While left is left and right is not
A thought can hold a million truths
And cast a thousand lies
So maybe front to back may
Be the way.

Submitted on 2007-02-04 22:45:41 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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So, I read it twice...not sure I can tell you what I think you are talking about..but I will take a stab at it none the less, I think its an internal war, thats caused by things external, the maybe despise of the world and its view(s)..im not sure if I see satan in here..but I wonder because of the whole "prayer to the one below" bit im not sure if its a paradox because most people pray to "a god in heaven" or its a paradox in the sense that everything written in suppose to represent its opposite meaning, ...meaning that you were saying that you are prayer to the heavens when refering to the one below, (this may make no sense) the poem also seems to go into transcendentalism to me for some reason, I could be so far off base, it not even funny, (actually it is)..but I think I see a stuggle to find I wanna say unique-ness, but "the path untaken has yet to be built" and the truth is relative. (And just as I was beginning to pat myself on the back for my infinite wisdom (lol!) I got lost again, I think.) My favorite stanzas are the last 2, and you absolutely have to explain the last line to me, because despite the fact that I like it, Im not sure why.

In the first stanza 3rd line, if you debunked that "without" to the next line, it would make it easier to read, <I dont usually pick at these things, but it kept bothering me :) >

Until we write again,

~ink~
| Posted on 2007-02-08 00:00:00 | by inkonspikuous | [ Reply to This ]
The world is a twisted place ... something that is hard to understand, never mind why things happen.

The poem was not written in first person, good!, a difficult thing not to do.

And no. you are not weird, just cutting into the things that bother the most.

liked this line "Nor history made through sight"

"Described a life of constant war", is a good line, showing the struggle just to be who you really are.

And no maybe, the meaning of this poem eludes me.

But I like it, like you enjoy a painting, not sure why but it is art.

Kind regards
E

| Posted on 2007-02-06 00:00:00 | by bornx2000 | [ Reply to This ]

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