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    Author: DonkeyMan
    Elite Ratio:    0.34 - 89/88/61
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Limerick/Comedy
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    hi I am Ben
    I am writing with a pen
    oh no it exploded
    my watermelon imploded
    I was going to eat it
    but now I must beat it
    and possibly greet it
    why do I keep Writing
    With my teeth I am biting
    okay I must go
    to go ut my toe
    nail is pail
    I steped on a snail.




    Submitted on 2007-02-05 15:31:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      haha this made me laugh. poor snail though i must say. i hope he was okay.
    | Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by onexlifex1chanc | [ Reply to This ]


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