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    dots Submission Name: *Questionsdots

    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Rant/
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       just a little something i scribbled...i modified it trying to follow some of the advice given to me thanz o those people

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    is it love or just lust?
    you make my body tingle
    you make me swoon
    your are sweet
    but sometimes you act different

    do i love him even though he is a friend?
    i think i mite like him and i know why
    i like you too but i cant figure that out

    can you measure up to him?
    you are nice but you have your moments
    maybe i would be better off with him
    why do i always compare you to him?

    why am i with you if he seems better?
    I am with you
    i could leave you but he lives so far away
    am i with you because it is more convinent?

    is he hiding his true self so i will like him?
    he seems perfect.
    nice sweet
    and he seems to love me.

    will you ever grow up?
    you act so immature and so sweet too.
    he is just sweet and nice.

    question without answers swarming my head
    sufficating me, i cant think anymore
    we need a break, i need to think things over

    Submitted on 2007-02-05 15:41:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a great write that Im sure you feel better about yourself after writing it
    Sometimes we need to put down in words our thoughts and feelings and we are then able to find the answers much more quicker
    It is also GREAT to see you posting again its been awhilke since Ive seen your name
    How are you doing
    You take care of yourself
    God Bless

    | Posted on 2007-02-07 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I can't agree with Joy. I like short and pithy and iffen the piece is called "questions" how much more do you need to give? I'm not so sure of the final line which seems a touch clumsy and ess balanced than the rest.
    | Posted on 2007-02-06 00:00:00 | by siradrian | [ Reply to This ]
      i think that this has the potential to be an amazing write, but i think under each question you should elaborate more, so it give the reader a sense of what you feel, a deeper sense of the confusion and whatever other emotion that he makes you feel. other then that though i cant say to much about it, and mind you this is just my opinion, keep it up and if you do lengthen it drop me a line so i can check it out...... take care....Joy
    | Posted on 2007-02-05 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]

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