This site will self destruct in 2 months, March 17.
It will come back, and be familiar and at the same time completely different.
All content will be deleted. Backup anything important.
--- Staff
Roleplay Cloud -

Sign up to EliteSkills

Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

Coming Back From Emo

Author: poetic_tragedy
ASL Info:    16/f/USA
Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 39 /55 /30
Words: 123
Class/Type: Poetry /Being a Teen
Total Views: 1366
Average Vote:    1.0000
Bytes: 815


I wrote this about the struggle people face when they decide to change themselves. This is mostly about my journey to undo my emo-ness.

Coming Back From Emo

Through it all
We rise to fall
Falling faster through the dark
We so gracefully missed the mark
Each time we falter and fail
The lives we touch grow frail
The light gets dimmer
The anger simmers
Run screaming through the black
Don't ever take it back
The mistakes we make now will shape us
Where the lives we lead will take us
Behind the smiles we secretly fake
Nothing restricts the things we will make
So let our real light shine
Don't be afraid to take what's mine
Let the fake smiles become real
Voice out loud the pain we feel
Throw away our razors
Take away the temptation to waver
Heal the skin that's been broken
Our voice, now, has spoken.

Submitted on 2007-02-05 18:33:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!


  Hey! I absolutely love this poem. I honestly have no negative comments. Not One!! I've been reading poems on here for a long LONG time and I have never EVER come across someone with as much talent as you!! I mean I would kill to have half the talent you have!! Your poems the reach something real you know? no lovey-dovey crap, no fake stuff it's real. It's how you really feel and people can sense that(I'm just guessing I don't actually know how you feel Lol) But seriously..I am VERY VERY impressed and that doesn't happen often :) Congrats. This ones going in my faves.

| Posted on 2007-03-19 00:00:00 | by kapri49 | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow. That's ama-za-zing. I think you've become better, and that's what everyone wants, is to become better. You're a really gifted person and I lob you forever. Lol, most of my favorited poems are yours, cause its hard for me to favorite stuff when I don't know them.

But anyway, like I was saying, I think you've become way betterer at writing. Which isn't saying much 'cause you were great to begin with! ANNYWHO.. About the poem,

It's really really really good. I lob it. Cause I remember when we were ohhhh so emo, and now I honestly can't stand labels. We just sort of needed something to call our own, and now you've grown out of it. If you know what I'm trying to say...... I'm not very good with saying stuff..... You know.... Haha anywayyy...
| Posted on 2007-02-05 00:00:00 | by xcut_up_angelx | [ Reply to This ]

Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?