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    dots Submission Name: Coming Back From Emodots
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    Author: poetic_tragedy
    ASL Info:    16/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 39/55/30
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 1071
    Average Vote:    1.0000
    Bytes: 815



    Description:
       I wrote this about the struggle people face when they decide to change themselves. This is mostly about my journey to undo my emo-ness.


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    dotsComing Back From Emodots
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    Through it all
    We rise to fall
    Falling faster through the dark
    We so gracefully missed the mark
    Each time we falter and fail
    The lives we touch grow frail
    The light gets dimmer
    The anger simmers
    Run screaming through the black
    Don't ever take it back
    The mistakes we make now will shape us
    Where the lives we lead will take us
    Behind the smiles we secretly fake
    Nothing restricts the things we will make
    So let our real light shine
    Don't be afraid to take what's mine
    Let the fake smiles become real
    Voice out loud the pain we feel
    Throw away our razors
    Take away the temptation to waver
    Heal the skin that's been broken
    Our voice, now, has spoken.




    Submitted on 2007-02-05 18:33:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey! I absolutely love this poem. I honestly have no negative comments. Not One!! I've been reading poems on here for a long LONG time and I have never EVER come across someone with as much talent as you!! I mean I would kill to have half the talent you have!! Your poems the reach something real you know? no lovey-dovey crap, no fake stuff it's real. It's how you really feel and people can sense that(I'm just guessing I don't actually know how you feel Lol) But seriously..I am VERY VERY impressed and that doesn't happen often :) Congrats. This ones going in my faves.

    Kapri
    | Posted on 2007-03-19 00:00:00 | by kapri49 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. That's ama-za-zing. I think you've become better, and that's what everyone wants, is to become better. You're a really gifted person and I lob you forever. Lol, most of my favorited poems are yours, cause its hard for me to favorite stuff when I don't know them.

    But anyway, like I was saying, I think you've become way betterer at writing. Which isn't saying much 'cause you were great to begin with! ANNYWHO.. About the poem,

    It's really really really good. I lob it. Cause I remember when we were ohhhh so emo, and now I honestly can't stand labels. We just sort of needed something to call our own, and now you've grown out of it. If you know what I'm trying to say...... I'm not very good with saying stuff..... You know.... Haha anywayyy...
    ily
    xoxo-sam
    | Posted on 2007-02-05 00:00:00 | by xcut_up_angelx | [ Reply to This ]


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