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    dots Submission Name: Chorus Romancedots
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    Author: poetic_tragedy
    ASL Info:    16/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 39/55/30
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1190
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 795



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       I know this sounds a little stalkerish, but I didn't know how to describe it perfectly.


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    dotsChorus Romancedots
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    They tell her it's not love
    But they don't really know
    When she's with him
    She can let her spirit go

    She tells him everything
    He does the same
    When they're not together
    Life seems just a game

    She can't be without him
    Not even for a day
    She would die without him
    He's her saving grace

    When they are forced apart
    She spends her time thinking when she'll see him again

    She's in a car underwater
    Suspended in midair
    She can't escape
    Unless he is there

    They tell her it's not love
    But they don't really know
    When she's with him
    She can let her spirit go




    Submitted on 2007-02-05 18:42:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this poem It's unbelievable that your only 14. :O I agree with bleeding tears that this poem could become and AMAZING song, but it doesn't remind me of a son I've already heard...I think it's really good . I think that the 4th Stanza/Verse Should be longer or different some how...I like the general idea it conveys just try and expand on it so it matches the others. That's just my opinion though...Another awesome poem :)
    | Posted on 2007-03-19 00:00:00 | by kapri49 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is cute and the story line of it all was cute because it was pretty basic.
    uhm..if i'm not mistaken, it looks like you listen to music while you're writing or you're singing because a lot of your writes happen to remind me of other lyrics i know and what not.
    i don't see how you think it's "stalkerish"
    but it can use a good amount of help.
    Peace<3


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    | Posted on 2007-02-06 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]


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