Chorus Romance

Author: poetic_tragedy ASL Info:    16/f/USA Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 39 /55 /30 Words: 113

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Chorus Romance

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They tell her it's not love But they don't really know When she's with him She can let her spirit go She tells him everything He does the same When they're not together Life seems just a game She can't be without him Not even for a day She would die without him He's her saving grace When they are forced apart She spends her time thinking when she'll see him again She's in a car underwater Suspended in midair She can't escape Unless he is there They tell her it's not love But they don't really know When she's with him She can let her spirit go

Submitted on 2007-02-05 18:42:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I really like this poem It's unbelievable that your only 14. :O I agree with bleeding tears that this poem could become and AMAZING song, but it doesn't remind me of a son I've already heard...I think it's really good . I think that the 4th Stanza/Verse Should be longer or different some how...I like the general idea it conveys just try and expand on it so it matches the others. That's just my opinion though...Another awesome poem :)

| Posted on 2007-03-19 00:00:00 | by kapri49 | [ Reply to This ]

this is cute and the story line of it all was cute because it was pretty basic. uhm..if i'm not mistaken, it looks like you listen to music while you're writing or you're singing because a lot of your writes happen to remind me of other lyrics i know and what not. i don't see how you think it's "stalkerish" but it can use a good amount of help. Peace<3 <bleedingtears>

| Posted on 2007-02-06 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]

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