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Chorus Romance

Author: poetic_tragedy
ASL Info:    16/f/USA
Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 39 /55 /30
Words: 113
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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I know this sounds a little stalkerish, but I didn't know how to describe it perfectly.

Chorus Romance

They tell her it's not love
But they don't really know
When she's with him
She can let her spirit go

She tells him everything
He does the same
When they're not together
Life seems just a game

She can't be without him
Not even for a day
She would die without him
He's her saving grace

When they are forced apart
She spends her time thinking when she'll see him again

She's in a car underwater
Suspended in midair
She can't escape
Unless he is there

They tell her it's not love
But they don't really know
When she's with him
She can let her spirit go

Submitted on 2007-02-05 18:42:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really like this poem It's unbelievable that your only 14. :O I agree with bleeding tears that this poem could become and AMAZING song, but it doesn't remind me of a son I've already heard...I think it's really good . I think that the 4th Stanza/Verse Should be longer or different some how...I like the general idea it conveys just try and expand on it so it matches the others. That's just my opinion though...Another awesome poem :)
| Posted on 2007-03-19 00:00:00 | by kapri49 | [ Reply to This ]
  this is cute and the story line of it all was cute because it was pretty basic.
uhm..if i'm not mistaken, it looks like you listen to music while you're writing or you're singing because a lot of your writes happen to remind me of other lyrics i know and what not.
i don't see how you think it's "stalkerish"
but it can use a good amount of help.

| Posted on 2007-02-06 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]

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