I really like this poem It's unbelievable that your only 14. :O I agree with bleeding tears that this poem could become and AMAZING song, but it doesn't remind me of a son I've already heard...I think it's really good . I think that the 4th Stanza/Verse Should be longer or different some how...I like the general idea it conveys just try and expand on it so it matches the others. That's just my opinion though...Another awesome poem :)
this is cute and the story line of it all was cute because it was pretty basic.
uhm..if i'm not mistaken, it looks like you listen to music while you're writing or you're singing because a lot of your writes happen to remind me of other lyrics i know and what not.
i don't see how you think it's "stalkerish"
but it can use a good amount of help.