Description: i was listening to techno, thinking about drugs and sex and such... i was day dreaming a rave and this is what came out. you gota read it slow, so take your time and enjoy!
Poison Kiss -------------------------------------------
i wanna spend forever
just discover every inch of you
one moment at a time
you know i need this
im so high i cant come down
never satisfied
i'll take all you have to give
there's no looking back
no turning back
join me in the Garden of Eden
you know it's the best bliss
one shot of this TechnoAcidElixer
drift deeper into the sounds
watch the colors that surround you
with eyes that cannot see
take me
breathe me
taste me
as the rush comes
i wanna feel it washing over me
chase faded days away
with moments you cant deny
you cant resist this
I enjoyed this, but I admit I may have missed some things as I was laughing half-way through it. You mispelled satisfied, and have it in here as "satisfried" and it really cracked me up. You may want to change that :)
But apart from that, I liked the emotion in this work, and I think you really conveyed your emotions to the reader well. All in all, I really enjoyed it!
Submission Name: Poison Kiss
