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    dots Submission Name: The Wicked Bitchdots

    Author: Kaygrl
    ASL Info:    26/female/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 162/239/241
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 837
    Average Vote:    2.5000
    Bytes: 630


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    dotsThe Wicked Bitchdots

    The wicked bitch is back!
    When she left, she left, left,
    all were happy,
    But now she's back,
    She's back, back,
    She couldn't take a hint,
    Take a hint, take a hint,
    That nobody likes her,
    Even her friends, her friends, friends,
    THat's why the shit, the shit shit,
    was beaten out of her,
    but she came back, back, back,
    and it's only a matter of time,
    til' she sports, she sports, sports,
    A fresh black eye,
    and leaves again,
    So take the hint,
    And get back where you came from!

    Submitted on 2007-02-06 12:01:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This right is awsome and thank you on the Coment on my poem and the spell check :)
    | Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by Spit | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the format! I think its one of a kind. Sorta a story. And it's certainly funny. Compliments to you!
    | Posted on 2007-02-06 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]
      im sorry but tht kinda scares me i write happy poems
    | Posted on 2007-02-06 00:00:00 | by DonkeyMan | [ Reply to This ]
      Um, this didn't really stike me as a poem, but more as one of those little clapping games that kids play... you know, like "Miss Mary Mack...Mack...Mack..." I think it was because of the way you repeated your ending words in your lines. It's rather distracting. It has potential though, I can feel the emotion you were putting into it. Just maybe revise it up a little where you don't have to use the same word so many times to get your structure to work. Other than that, it was a compelling read.

    Thanks for sharing, and keep writing!

    | Posted on 2007-02-06 00:00:00 | by Mandi Gayle | [ Reply to This ]

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