Description: I know it's short and I did want to make it longer, but I'm not sure if that would take away from it or not. I haven't written anything good in a while. I don't even think this is as good as when I first started writing.
Wash away the doubts
Hidden within my thoughts
Keep away the demons
Haunting my soul to hell
Make my heart stop beating
Don't want my lungs to breathe
I'm living in this disaster
A self- created misery
Perhaps longer would be best, but first you might could think of a little editing in what's there. E-mail me, maybe we'll work on it together--unless you forgot my address, in which case let me know with a PM or something.
Cliche subject, obviously, but I found I liked the poem regardless. I think you could probably go far with rhyming in this one... there was a little bit of a rhyme with breathe and misery, *a little bit*. The rhythm in this poem was also pretty well-composed.
Now this one I like better then your last one was going to write how I didn't like your last poem but decided to give ya another try and you did good I like this one keep up the good work like this peace & stay safe...