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    Author: wovenwords
    ASL Info:    19/F/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 108/303/189
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    Somewhere
    there's a box with all the answers
    overflowing from its cardboard sides
    labeled "No more questions."
    in thick, black Sharpie.

    And under my bed
    sits a box with all my sins...
    forest green jealousy
    clay red anger
    and magenta infidelities
    all molded into crayons
    that sketch pictures
    of butterflies turned to monsters.

    And on the high shelf in your closet,
    is a box of all your excuses; dusted and worn
    each sugar-coated word
    and lie-laden sentence
    sit in neat piles
    waiting for
    your next failed relationship to run its course;
    for your fingers to dial for my voice once again.

    Somewhere,
    sits a box with all the answers
    high on a mountain
    buried beneath
    everything that went wrong.




    Submitted on 2007-02-07 09:01:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I have these boxes too... of answers, sins and excuses all stashed away for no-one to see but me.

    You make this very vivid and sharp(ie)-like... such melancholy.

    A beautifully concise piece.

    Peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      I absolutly loved this! It started with something simple, a box, and you molded it beautifully. I really enjoyed the way you used the colors and how it started and ended on the same vibe.
    | Posted on 2007-03-18 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      great write awsome read. thanks for the comment. i hope to read more by you soon. keep posting....
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    tina
    | Posted on 2007-02-07 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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