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    dots Submission Name: To My Lovedots
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    Author: DeathTone
    ASL Info:    32 / Male / United States
    Elite Ratio:    5.54 - 81/55/30
    Words: 258
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 750
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1394



    Description:
       This is a tribute to my wife, to say sorry for being so wraped up into things, i forgot to tell you how much i still love you, with all of my heart. This is filled with so much love, even if it doesn't seem like it.


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    dotsTo My Lovedots
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    I am just a man, who like others takes things for granted
    And I never meant to take you for granted
    You told me the other day, how you think something is wrong
    And you feel like itís your fault.
    I wish I would have said what I wanted to but I never did
    So I figured now is as good as a time as ever.
    When we first met butterflies fluttered around when you were near
    Every time we kissed I fell deeper in love
    With every breath you took in, I held mine
    Where ever you walked a garden of flowers would blossom at your feet
    No matter how dark and gloomy my day was, you still brightened me up
    Your laugh was like hearing angles singing from heaven
    Glistening eyes sparkled with every smile you made
    My world was complete when you were in my presence
    I was honored to have you by my side
    The ground that you walked on, I worshiped
    Never have I wanted another so much
    That I yearn to be with you at all times
    When I awoke from a nightmare, the sight of you put me at ease
    There is so much more I could say
    Because there is so much more for me you do
    And to answer the question of how I feel now, if itís you or me
    The way I feel for you now is the same I felt for you then
    After all these years, my heart and soul is still yours.




    Submitted on 2007-02-07 12:15:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      yes, it is very beautiful....i think she liked it lol
    its a very deep, heartfelt piece, and obviously very personal. but a lot of ppl will relate to the part about taking others for granted...we are all guilty of that, whether we admit it or not.
    i like it, but most important, so did your wife...that says it all i think.
    job well done! now go give her a big kiss!!
    michelle.

    p.s.
    "Your laugh was like hearing angles"
    i think you want 'angels' there.
    | Posted on 2007-02-07 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      that my love was so beautiful i cryed...thank you so much...you are truely the best..*i love you*....*xoxo*
    | Posted on 2007-02-07 00:00:00 | by DeathsWife | [ Reply to This ]


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