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    dots Submission Name: Rosaliedots
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    Author: shmurr
    ASL Info:    18 / male / maine
    Elite Ratio:    1.58 - 34/129/128
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1150
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    Description:
       this is a song I wrote that is a combination of a lot of the lines in my other poems. i like the lyrics, but the guitar is the best part of this song by far


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    dotsRosaliedots
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    Rosalie, Rosalie,
    Could you come back down?
    Can I tie you tight
    To touch this ground?
    Cause youíre hanging from the clouds again.

    Rosalie, Rosalie
    Do you dream of things?
    When I dream of you
    You have no wings
    And youíre not so far from reach.

    Come to me, come to me
    Can I speak to you?
    Say for me that
    You want me to,
    And maybe Iíll untie my tongue.
    You keep on following down the sun.
    But you forgot about me, Rosalie.

    In the trees, in the trees
    Can you feel that wind?
    Youíre like a portrait
    And Iím wearing thin,
    And there are crows across my back.

    On my knees, on my knees,
    Itís so hard to tell,
    I saw you smiling
    Beside the backyard well,
    But now youíre up above the tree line.

    Rosalie, Rosalie,
    Can you sing to me?
    Across these hills
    And withered weeds,
    I want to hear you before Iím done.
    You keep on following down the sun.
    But you forgot about me, Rosalie.




    Submitted on 2007-02-07 15:30:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hey i love this one!it's so honest and sweet.it's like you're pleading and pining,but it's pretty cool!however, be careful coz sometimes it may get bland.but heck i love it so much!keep it up!

    EsCaPisT
    | Posted on 2007-02-07 00:00:00 | by EsCaPisT | [ Reply to This ]


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