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    dots Submission Name: If Beauty Existsdots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Trompe l'oeil (French for "fool the eye") is an art term that describes a photorealistic style. It's often used on buildings to mimic windows or other elements.

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    dotsIf Beauty Existsdots

    At the end of the day
    she takes off her trompe l'oeil beauty.
    The perfect skin washes down the drain.
    The sculptured curls turn bamboo straight.
    The blue contacts return to the case.
    You look at this bland being,
    and you wonder if beauty exists.
    Perhaps even plants paint on their blooms
    when no one is looking.

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      This is beautiful. You brought me to tears, and not a lot of people can do that. It sounds like you're trying to describe our every attempt to make ourselves acceptable or "beautiful". This hit such a cord with me you don't even know. Thank you for writing it.
    | Posted on 2004-07-28 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the suggestion that perhaps flowers remove their make-up when no one is looking--perhaps that's why night is so dark?
    That reminds me of times when as a child I would peer hard out of the corner of my eyes--then abruptly turn my head hoping to catch unawares--the fairies I just KNEW were in the corner.
    I Sally Bland am a truly "bland" being lol, but then I do tons of money on make-up and other cosmetic products. Cannot really think of any criticism though, Silver
    | Posted on 2004-06-07 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      the plants / blooms imagery was awesome!! wow!! (applause)... this one really made me chuckle... perhaps that's what plants do... who knows??!!!

    here's a thought. perhaps beauty does exist under that bland being who's covered in chemicals - something you cannot see... reminds me of a quote from The Little Prince (Antoine De Saint Exupery):

    "And now here is my secret, a very simple secret:
    It is only with the heart that one can see rightly;
    what is essential is invisible to the eye."

    great write
    | Posted on 2004-06-07 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know if this is the effect you wanted on the audience, but from this corner there was a good laugh. Yup, if we don't have faces to put on, we'll pull funny ones, but we are sooo afraid of showing our own. Why?
    | Posted on 2004-06-07 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow..that was really amazing. It was short but it said so much. I absolutely loved the plant reference at the end, it was a fantastic way to end everything and the idea was also very thought provoking. Keep up the great work!
    | Posted on 2004-06-06 00:00:00 | by Babysweet56 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really well done... i love it! i love the end with the plants painting themselves while no one else is watching... makes you think what beauty actually is and not what society portrays it to be... great write!
    | Posted on 2004-06-06 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      love it...reminds me of my sister always wearing makeup..she wont ever leave thehouse without it...no complaints just wanted to say its wonderful...i like your picture by the way...smiles ange
    | Posted on 2004-06-06 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice write with a very female sensitivity that I just don't have. But I happen to know that plants do not wash off their make-up at night.
    | Posted on 2004-06-06 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice. "the perfect skin washes down the drain..." great line! i've always been amazed by women who put so much make up on. i always wondered, what are they "making up" for? i like the reference at the end to the flowers perhaps painting on their blooms. great ending! another great slice of minimalism from you, dumplin!
    | Posted on 2004-06-06 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Just thought I'd comment one poem everyday since you have so many. This one is pretty good, really had me thinking and mentally nodding in agreement with almost everything in the poem. Another fanrastic job, as always.
    | Posted on 2004-06-10 00:00:00 | by JR Hoodlum | [ Reply to This ]
      O wow. This was absolutely marvelous and true. Looks can be rather deceiving. You may look at a person with blue eyes, skin looking pure and healthy, hair so well formed, but then the person goes home, gets the mask off and into its genuine form. The same can be with those who may seem grotesque. But beauty does exist, you just got to look inside of it. Inner beauty is real beauty.

    Thank you for your comment on my "an unattainable dream". I appreciate it very much, and am very flushed to know its my best work or seems so. I changed the word gluing/glued into forging/forged. Thank you again.

    By the way, you're a very pretty lady :).
    Take care.
    | Posted on 2004-06-20 00:00:00 | by wordsofmind | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this is perfect! I absolutely LOVE the imagery The simplicity and "this-is-the-way-it-is" description is great, even a little chilling...
    | Posted on 2004-06-06 00:00:00 | by Erchomenos | [ Reply to This ]

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