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Ice Queen


Author: PiperH
ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
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It's what you want it to mean. It could be about love, about going crazy, or about depression. But I will tell you this, my original intention was not to write about death... So I guess then, it can't be about anything. But if that's what you see, then that's what you see.


Ice Queen



Frozen
tears turn to ice
endless dreamless empty nights
with haunted whispers
that bring her closer
imagine a world that is dead
the thoughts are frozen in her head
never to be melted
never to be said




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  "endless dreamless empty nights
with haunted whispers
that bring her closer
imagine a world that is dead"
Beautiful. Perfect. Love it.
Brilliantly written line.
Great write in general.
-Elissa :)
| Posted on 2009-01-25 00:00:00 | by KillSpoon | [ Reply to This ]
  This was written very well and I liked it alot. It sort of reminds me of V.C. Andrews (best novelist ever) if she wrote poetry. It's really good. It also reminds me on some of my more melancholic days. It was short and simple, but the emotion and wording was great and made it a great poem. I often write like this. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

Saint Razor
| Posted on 2007-02-08 00:00:00 | by brknprlcndol | [ Reply to This ]
  I think that the poem is about love... hidden love. The frozen landscape gives the impression of dilated time - everything lasts longer when one suffers of love - and then you mention the "haunted whispers" that are the hallucinations of the lover's callings - which, in fact, will never come . In the end she freezes her thoughts in a moment of pure happiness...... this is how I interpreted your poem .
It was a great write... keep on the good work,
Sad Lion
| Posted on 2007-02-08 00:00:00 | by Sad Lion | [ Reply to This ]
  In a lot of fantasy/science fiction writing there is usually the wasted frozen landscape that makes for fantastically dark chase scenes (ref. Mary Shelley's Frankenstein).
From this short piece I get visions of empty ice, frozen within the sands of time, I am not sure if that was your intention, but you said interpet it as you wish, and I shall do just that.

Frozen
tears turn to ice
endless dreamless empty nights


Here I see an ice palace, of sorts, where the sun never shines, where the winds blow sharply, whistling through every nook and cranny, and where the blizzard snow never ceases to fall. It's such a cold atmosphere made in three lines, absolutely minimalistic, but it's effective nonetheless.

with haunted whispers
that bring her closer
imagine a world that is dead


This is the part where most people would assume you are talking about death. However I don't think so. In my opinion you are only making a parallel with the ice world you created in the first three lines being paralleled and contrasted at the same time like a world of the dead. Usually if we are having problems seeing what you wish us to see, "world that is dead" is a great help and here the analogy is used pretty well.
"Haunted whispers" is another phrase I will examine, because it can mean the literal haunted whisperings of the dead, but since this has nothing to do with the dead, I will then turn to the other interpetation, which is that of possible schizophrenia, voices around or voices in one's head. The fact that you can give me such ideas from two words is just mind blowing really.

the thoughts are frozen in her head
never to be melted
never to be said


Ah sweet cold cliffhangers. The ending is most..unconventional, if I say so myself, and now the block of ice has gathered around the once bright room I saw earlier in the palace.

Thank you for the lovely read, especially the last two lines.
Cheers
Azuire
| Posted on 2007-02-07 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]


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