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    dots Submission Name: The Only One I Needdots
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    Author: andrews soldier
    Elite Ratio:    0.01 - 0/1/3
    Words: 340
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    THE ONLY ONE I NEED



    Youíre all i want for the rest of my days,
    And youíll be in my heart always,
    What we have now I donít want to sever,
    Coz we are gonna be best friends forever,
    No matter how good I feel about these notions,
    I canít find a way to stop my emotions,
    I have nothing left to lose,
    I donít have the chance to choose,
    You are one of the people in this world that I would die for,
    Thatís one of the things that you cannot ignore,
    Just like Andrew and Kateís memory I hope you are here to stay,
    Ill take the life of anyone who tries to take that away,
    Over the last few months ive become so lyrical,
    And you are what ive always dreamt of-the miracle,
    Itís taken my heart being broken,
    For me to be woken,
    You are the one who keeps me achieving,
    Im sure ill be fine as long as I never have to watch you leaving,
    If your ever in trouble then im on my way,
    No matter what the time-night or day,
    To help in any possible way,




    Will you sit here with me and watch the sun rise,
    And gaze into each others eyes,
    And watch it change from day to night,
    And from dark to light,
    Im not talking about boyfriend and girlfriend,
    Im meaning as just a friend,
    Because I donít want this to ever end,
    Maybe this is making me sound like a faggot,
    All I know is that you are one of the few who doesnít treat me like a maggot,
    When you talked to me I feel blessed,
    Its you I want not the rest,
    I donít care if everything else will disappear,
    Just as long as you are near,
    Thereís just one thing left to say,
    And it shouldnít be said any other way,
    Lauren youíre the only friend that I need,
    For you I would live die and bleed.




    Submitted on 2007-02-07 18:31:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very well written, though some rhymes seemed a bit forced. My only suggestion would be to change Coz to Cause or because. with coz it seems less sincere. an overall good write. kudos for bringing out my sentimental side.

    ~Max
    | Posted on 2007-02-08 00:00:00 | by Max R. | [ Reply to This ]


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