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    dots Submission Name: River Walkdots
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    Author: Silent_Tears
    ASL Info:    16/f/BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 90/111/59
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsRiver Walkdots
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    White dog, brown spots, happy tail

    long dirt trail, going on forever

    Over the beast backside

    Trees like fur fill in the granite backdrop

    Wispy clouds line up in rows along the crisp blue

    Cawing black birds and annoying white gulls

    Line of deep color along the river's rocks




    Submitted on 2007-02-08 01:04:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this poem K, great job as always. Very insightful and descriptive. Gives the reader a nice picture of what it is your seeing and even feeling at this point. I got really brought in, like a little story, i could see zena and her little tail lol.
    | Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very enjoyable poem with excellent word pictures!
    | Posted on 2007-02-08 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow i like this poem. it really paints a mental picture i felt almost as if i was looking directly at a painting of this picture. Great wording and poem structure. keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2007-02-08 00:00:00 | by Demon__666 | [ Reply to This ]


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