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    dots Submission Name: Unexposed Angerdots
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    Author: loveispain
    ASL Info:    23/f/ME
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 283/198/51
    Words: 244
    Class/Type: Rant/Love
    Total Views: 945
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1566



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       *sigh*..whoo...almost felt good to write this...but..a sadness comes over me..that a part of me DOES feel this way. I push these feelings down..I don't want to be angry and bitter...but a part of me is...and some days this is how I feel...It's just one big rant with no structure or anything of the sort...but I just had to write. It's weird how I can be so mad...and still feel love at the same time. I hate it.


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    You could have at least looked me in the eyes,
    While you ripped my heart out.
    Couldn't stand before me,
    And break promises to my face.
    Most of what we had was blind anyway,
    So it makes sense you'd end it,
    With your back turned.
    While I begged for closure,
    You piled on the pain,
    And let me lie in the poison of our "love."
    Hear that bitterness in your voice,
    When I ask why, when I ask how,
    When I ask anything, that might make you,
    Have to explain yourself.
    Like it's my damn fault,
    Like I shouldn't have questions,
    Well I do, and I don't understand,
    How you took back those words,
    How you can tell me never again,
    Will you ever want to love me,
    Will you ever want to touch me,
    Like we did when we were lovers.
    This clearly only makes sense to you,
    Because I am utterly lost in the useless questions,
    Of trying to figure you out.
    It would be really nice to think our love,
    Was real and genuine,
    But I always thought feelings like that lasted,
    So if they are so dispensable, and so meaningless,
    I'm forced to even queston the last four years,
    Of my Life.
    Thanks. Thanks so much,
    For doing the "right" thing.
    So glad you can live with the "rightness,"
    While I continually choke on air of "wrongness,"
    That I breathe, in my life without you.




    Submitted on 2007-02-08 16:05:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW... that is all i can really say. I pictured a break up. The girl holding her head high while trying to fight away her pain and keep the anger she has bottled up inside. To me he doesn't seem to need her like she FEELS she needs him. Apparently he wasn't good enough for her and he wasn't good enough for her. Meaning ( they aren't ment for eachother).

    That was really great... it kept me reading.

    ~Maggie
    | Posted on 2007-06-14 00:00:00 | by Magger32 | [ Reply to This ]
      that was lovely, very sincere (srry if i misspell anything, not a great speller), and very... well stunning... :D losing someone is always so very hard, love always hurts, you can never be to sure about anyone... or at least that's wot i have found out, i would like to read more of your wrok, if you would tell me wot you think of mine, i feel that we write alike, it reminds me of when someone that i thought loved me, left me... you have strong emotions, and great potential *nods* take care, and i will be reading more

    Zack
    | Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by Blood†Tears | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this piece very much. though heartbreak may be painful and depressing it's good to know that pieces as nice as this one are inspired by them.

    take care
    kat
    | Posted on 2007-02-10 00:00:00 | by moonlitsky | [ Reply to This ]


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