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    dots Submission Name: I Never Thought You'd Be So Bolddots
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    Author: kathleenbrennan
    ASL Info:    20's/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    1.71 - 80/84/74
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsI Never Thought You'd Be So Bolddots
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    I can see you're eyes.
    I can hear your voice.
    I see right through your vast disguise.
    I know this was by choice.

    I know that you don't love them.
    I'm the one that you will need.
    We know you're far above them.
    You're caught up in you're greed.

    You're not the one I thought I knew.
    I never could've guessed.
    The words you spoke, I thought were true.
    You stabbed me in the chest.

    Your eyes remain dry and cold.
    The night sky turned dark gray.
    I never though you'd be so bold.
    And it's done, walk away.




    Submitted on 2007-02-08 16:44:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow... this poem is so familiar to me... I mean, I can identify with everything stated in this piece. I absolutely love it, and apologize if you are going through the same things I am. Take it from someone who knows first hand, it's no fun. I hope you don't mind, but I'm going to add this to my favorites. God bless and keep it up!
    | Posted on 2007-02-08 00:00:00 | by black_beauty18 | [ Reply to This ]


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