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Author: selfbetrayal
ASL Info:    19/F/NA
Elite Ratio:    8 - 212 /76 /10
Words: 186
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Unoriginal title I know...not sure what else could put...


I shatter
Dissolve within myself.
Swirl like flotsam in the ebb of childhood dreams
Of what i hope are nightmares
And flung free
From thoughts too bad to last.
Caught within the swell of seething summer nights
Beside a bloodless, dark massed sea
I cannot forget. I cannot fight
My memories.
I trip, and cut myself on jagged fragments of my past.
I writhe in the grip of half remembered pain,
And only in not being find relief
And only in dying can atone.
No one can understand
You cannot know
How much you hurt me with your disbelief,
Or how thoughts of self destruction scheme
Whether I am with you or alone.
No matter how untouched and bright they seem
I am forever tarnished by their sin.
I cannot show
How desperate I feel, and how afraid.
You do not notice how I note each blade
You do not see me eye the passing cars
You do not see the long dug trenches or the scars
Where ignorant armies grind
In slow and graceless wars
Across the moon blanched landscape of my mind.

Submitted on 2007-02-08 18:08:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Oh, this is really excellent, wonderfully put together by a deft poetic hand .... marvelous turns of phrase ("ignorant armies" is actually from a poem by Mathew Arnold, which you may not be aware of, but either way it is fine..) Loved this ... bravo ... bravo ... bravo ...michael
| Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow... words can't explain the thoughts i have about this, it was incredible, all of the emotion (which i am a big fan of) just drowns me in comments and good jobs and such, but this is to good for them, you have so much potential and you know that you do, don't you? it's good to see that your putting all of this out on here, it inspires me so much, but i have not clue how to even attepmt to use your talent. If i were to read it alloud, the words would roll out of my mouth and look like soup, but you put is so perfectly, bravo, keep up the good work *nods*

| Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by Blood†Tears | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a damn good piece of poetry my friend. Once again you have managed to wow the cynical critic. If you keep up work like his there will be no room for anone else one my fav list.

| Posted on 2007-02-12 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]

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