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    dots Submission Name: My Miracledots
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    Author: black_beauty18
    ASL Info:    25/Female/Hutchinson, KS
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 153/146/46
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMy Miracledots
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    At first it was unreal, seemingly a dream,
    Is there really a little person growing inside me?
    In my heart, I was overwhelmed with a sense of joy,
    I began planning- Jayla for a girl, DeAndre for a boy.
    I dreaded all the sleepless nights I was sick,
    But anxiously awaited your first tiny kick.
    In my mind I feared the pain to come,
    But it was forgotten when I discovered I would have a son.
    Daddy painted the nursery, mommy bought you toys,
    We wanted everything just right for our perfect little boy.
    Then the time came, one foggy night,
    I've never known such excitement, suspense, and fright!
    When I finally got the chance to hold my precious son,
    I realized that my life had only just begun.




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      Another thing I can't say I've experienced (being a 17-year old male), but was also told very well.

    I love the way you portrayed the miracle of life, which is truly quite a miracle.

    Also, yet another grand ending. I love this poem!

    -Ethan
    | Posted on 2007-11-26 00:00:00 | by Inkybro | [ Reply to This ]
      Thanks so much for your kind remarks on my latest post, Time Disappears. I don't often get personal in my poetry, but this particular one is very personal. Smiles, Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-02-08 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Truly a beautiful poem about the wonders, anticipations, fears, and joys of bringing a child into the world. You perfectly ended this poem with "When I finally got the chance to hold my precious son, I realized that my life had only just begun." I must admit you brought back memories for me and I'm still smiling. :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-02-08 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      o hell yes. rhyme flow content i loved it. and if this is directly personal. congratz!!
    | Posted on 2007-02-08 00:00:00 | by lark | [ Reply to This ]


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