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    dots Submission Name: Buchanandots
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    Author: andthebandgoes
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 12/16/11
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 591
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 469



    Description:
       Was very very angry.

    That's all.

    Not angst, though, is it?


    (I know only 1 of those was a sentence.)


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    dotsBuchanandots
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    charisma with an acid tongue
    drama personified

    words like a labyrinth

    not knowing what to say
    I call your bluffs

    disappoint me

    others claim you
    I hold tighter

    as you slip away
    nothing to hold

    but the foggy visage

    of a liar
    a cheat
    a fool

    who likes to say
    I love you
    instead of goodbye




    Submitted on 2007-02-08 20:51:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The reason I enjoyed this was that it was like you reached into your brain, took out the words, and slapped them angrily on the page. Sometimes poems are good simply because of the fact that they were scribbled in pure, unaltered emotion instead of being well-thought-out. This is sufficiently angry and illustrates the types of thoughts one has when they're angry--choppy and sometimes unconnected.

    Quite nice. :]
    | Posted on 2007-04-17 00:00:00 | by wovenwords | [ Reply to This ]
      Sounds like one of those love-hate things... I like the description of the other character; it's interesting that you contrast good traits with bad by disconnecting them that way. Nice ending, by the way.

    It's good to see a newbie off to a good start. Looking forward to seeing your best works.

    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2007-02-10 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]


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