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    dots Submission Name: Concavedots
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    Author: andthebandgoes
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 12/16/11
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 579
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    Description:
       I was inspired by my surroundings.

    Argyle, tennis rackets, and percocet.


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    dotsConcavedots
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    You are everyone
    You are nothing
    You are the epitome of low
    You are jealousy disguised
    You are not the mountain.

    You are the valley whose bottom others esteem to reach

    You are everyone


    You are hollow.


    They are no one
    They are everything
    They are impossible to satiate.
    They are easy to please.
    They are not tangible.

    They are the something between you and sincerity

    You are everyone

    They are hollow.




    Submitted on 2007-02-08 20:55:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hard to understand. I thought there was tennis involved, but it turned into some self-contradictory musing. I think there might need to be a little more development in here...

    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2007-02-10 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]


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