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    Author: andthebandgoes
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 12/16/11
    Words: 45
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsdeparteddots
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    Though beneath you are soft and pink,
    You are plagued with insatiable thirst.
    Tireless winds leave you scratchy and painful.
    Yet, I have nothing for you to drink,
    For all I can give leaves you thirsting for more.
    Scratchy and painful

    Chapped lips.




    Submitted on 2007-02-08 20:57:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Another laugh, though this one was mostly kept in my head. You've got an interesting way of tossing in a twist ending when the reader thinks they know what's going on.

    --crimson echo

    p.s. In case you hadn't noticed, I'm leaving comments all across the board; I'm tired of seeing people show up, read, and ignore the "post something" obligation.
    | Posted on 2007-02-10 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]


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