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    dots Submission Name: Keep Trystdots
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    Author: andthebandgoes
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 12/16/11
    Words: 18
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 604
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Tell me if you get it. Please tell me you get it.


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    dotsKeep Trystdots
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    Across a sea
    Of penguins and flamingos
    A sight!

    Bedraggled countenances
    converse
    as rapture ensues.




    Submitted on 2007-02-08 20:59:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I still don't get it even after you told me! Only when I realised it was referring to "across the dance floor" and the first part of the second stanza makes sense...
    Minimalism was never my thing, but I think you pulled this off pretty ok..
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-02-12 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      No one ever gets it. :(

    It's two outcasts at a school dance.

    get it now?
    | Posted on 2007-02-10 00:00:00 | by andthebandgoes | [ Reply to This ]
      ...Sorry, I don't get it. I would really like to say I do, but I've got problems understanding minimalism... My apologies.

    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2007-02-10 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]


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