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    dots Submission Name: osifdots
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    Author: andthebandgoes
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 12/16/11
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 589
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 498



    Description:
       I wrote it because I was crushin' like whoah. I'm kinda over it now, but I still like the poem. It's kind of creepy, though. whatever.


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    dotsosifdots
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    Blue lights
    give me thoughts
    of Robert Deniro
    in a beach house

    sultry lights
    give me thoughts
    of sweaty nights
    on a rooftop

    flourescent lights
    give me thoughts
    of cardboard ladies
    and $5 rum

    streetlamp lights
    give me thoughts
    of ravi shankar
    and temporary tattoos

    blue green purple lights
    give me thoughts
    of man woman
    creepy




    Submitted on 2007-02-08 21:00:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The person that it was written about would understand it completely. I just put it up because it was in the same folder as the rest of them.
    | Posted on 2007-02-10 00:00:00 | by andthebandgoes | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay, then--a new level on the weird meter has now been achieved. I may have to rebuild the goshdarn thing...I almost like it, but not quite. I'm confused...

    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2007-02-10 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]


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