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    dots Submission Name: Treffungdots
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    Author: andthebandgoes
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 12/16/11
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 650
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 424



    Description:
       This is an amalgamation of a poem I liked and a song I love. It isn't plagiarism, I swear, they aren't anything alike.

    I just really wanted to mimic the feeling I got when I read it/listened to it.


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    dotsTreffungdots
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    Ich sehe dich.

    Parted lips become swinging hips
    Hush hush just us
    Indifference mein liebe
    Forget me nots
    When you depart

    Swinging hips on rocking ships
    Hush hush just us
    Thrashing seas remind us
    A rose is a rose
    When you alight

    Rocking ships on languid trips
    Hush hush just us

    Kannst du sehen?




    Submitted on 2007-02-08 21:02:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ...Why do I get the feeling you have even stranger taste in music than my old friend Anth? I don't know. On the other hand, he listened to polka from time to time...

    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2007-02-10 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]


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