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    dots Submission Name: Melody for Twodots
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    Author: Roula
    ASL Info:    18/female
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 46/64/45
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMelody for Twodots
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    Infected in emotion of farewells,
    created desolation for a moment-
    the dull elements shine.

    Beyond piercing intentions,
    a girl who was trying
    sunk into a memory forgotten.

    Subtle promises shatter into pieces
    terminating the melody for two,
    and my heart is the victim.

    Eager to kill with kindness
    she whispered secondhand thoughts
    which captivated me in a moment.

    I demand her attention-
    ultimately a faker's company,
    to understand this decision.

    She smiled at me,
    misleading my struggles,
    it was her desperate weapon.

    I tried not to notice,
    the shimmering tear in her eye;
    She knew she had me.

    The melody for two continues
    with a skewed symphony,
    lacking harmony.




    Submitted on 2007-02-08 22:08:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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