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    dots Submission Name: Crimson Lifedots
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    Author: I_m not Broken
    ASL Info:    17/F/IDK
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 91/98/68
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 620
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1018



    Description:
       Edited version of Insane Choices


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    dotsCrimson Lifedots
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    Unending agony comsumes my tortured soul
    Your insanity plauges my body and mind as a whole
    The sunset is forever stained with your crimson life
    For I can no longer live in your world of lies
    Let me be in this life you call a hell on Earth
    For my exisistance has been unwated from the day of my birth
    You say you'll set my soul afire, free me from the devil
    My fate, my destiny....You taken it all away
    But your uncaring words have torn away all of my emotions for you
    You've killed the world that shown down from above
    You've tried to save me from myself
    But I'm dying to hear the truth,
    So you left, left me alone to face the facts,
    Now here you lie at me feet begging for one more chance
    My heart is begging me to forgive you
    While my conscience tells me to never let you come back
    This battle inside me is never ending, my sanity is laid aside
    For insane choices must be made




    Submitted on 2007-02-09 10:14:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked it.
    Unending agony comsumes my tortured soul
    Your insanity plauges my body and mind as a whole
    Thats my favorite part.
    | Posted on 2007-02-10 00:00:00 | by onexlifex1chanc | [ Reply to This ]


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