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    dots Submission Name: bring it arounddots
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    Author: austin
    ASL Info:    22/ Male/ Odessa, Texas
    Elite Ratio:    4.41 - 376/396/84
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 761
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 673



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       realizing your dreams, and finding the strength to hold onto them.


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    dotsbring it arounddots
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    Hold onto nothing, then bring it back around
    it might get better the second time
    no amount of thread can stitch me
    and you know these bars can't hold me...for long

    I needed to come clean
    I needed to see things behind the wall
    I needed to feel the freedom
    and surround myself...in this

    Erase the wasted seconds and blemishes
    clean the cancer on the slate of sanity
    reborn in the ashes of sin
    rid me of the struggles from within

    hard to find the stance
    strength almost seems distant
    A figure I can never grasp
    but something i always dream of




    Submitted on 2007-02-09 11:56:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey friend! Sorry it has been a long while since I have commented! :( I'm a bad friend...lol...
    In the first stanza I like how you say "it might get better the second time" because in reality we are all given second chances....we just don't realize when those second chances run out...and that's when tragedy happens...when you lose your dreams because you were "waiting" for the "right" time. The "right" time is always now. That's how I see it anyway. "you know these bars can't hold me...for long" I like that part too because you are one who will take every opportunity thrown at you in hopes that it will push you forward into your dreams. "Erase the wasted seconds and blemishes" I like that aspect too because that is exactly what second chances give you....a clean slate. Or, "reborn in the ashes of sin"...that's an awesome line by the way. ;)
    "A figure I can never grasp/but something i always dream of"
    Brent, you will grasp your hopes and wishes...they will become reality.
    Keep on keepin' on. :D
    Great job!
    beth
    | Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      All this thing needs is a chorus and it wouldnt be a half bad song.

    I could hear a hard rockin tune based on these words.

    Nice job Brent, thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2007-02-16 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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