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    dots Submission Name: you took it alldots

    Author: dark figure
    ASL Info:    17/m/uk
    Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 66/74/29
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       meh i dunno i think i might delete it im not sure about this one

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    dotsyou took it alldots

    its what i had for you
    when you left you took more than what you came with
    didn't look back
    while i was looking on

    clutching on to what was left
    holding on tight
    remembering sweet nothings
    they way we used to talk all night

    that glow you used to have
    when my eyes were fixated on you
    has now become dim
    are you really happy?

    you were every thing to me
    my smile when i was down
    you were my warmth when i was cold
    now you only make me with that i could drown

    drown in my pain
    suffocate in this sorrow
    why couldn't you take this with you
    you took every thing else....

    Submitted on 2007-02-09 13:41:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written very well. I liked it very much, so did the people reading over my shoulder. Please don't delete this, I'd like to add it to my favs. It flowed well and was worded nicely. it reminds me of my ex boyfrined leaving me the same way. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    Saint Razor
    | Posted on 2007-02-09 00:00:00 | by brknprlcndol | [ Reply to This ]

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