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    dots Submission Name: Music When You're Home With A Cold dots
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    Author: Guernica
    ASL Info:    17/male
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 77/114/67
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMusic When You're Home With A Cold dots
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    It'd be an easy out,
    to take some Benedryl and make myself throw up.

    Deeply impressing, leaving a mold to bear witness
    to my foul state. I'd like to go to a movie or eat Chinese food.

    That would only make it worse, though.

    And I don't feel like my head weighs eight pounds or whatever. It's keeping me from looking up,
    looking out at the window and the snow that's melting and the snow that looks light blue.

    Sleepy though I slept till noon.

    Let's get together and sit at my kitchen table. Talk about menial things. Finish up the tea. (won't get it back till the fall).

    Let's lay together on the couch and let the sun crust up our lips.

    So when we'd kiss, it'd be like two rocks.

    And here's where I insert the metaphor about sparking a flame, but I'm too sick to be clever.

    Bringing us back to point A.

    That I'm sick and wishing I wasn't.
    That I'm lazy and wishing I saw you today.




    Submitted on 2007-02-09 14:17:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Perfect.
    You once said 'it's all about creating a mood'...
    and I can feel the mood here very well.
    It's a great thing.
    But it makes me feel ghetto.
    Because missing someone makes me feel lame. xD
    Cause there's no way they could be feeling the same.

    Yeah.
    -Kelsea
    | Posted on 2007-05-09 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this... It's comical and at the same time sad. Being sick sucks, and I like that you talked about all the things you feel like doing but can't because you feel like poo. I, too, have a cold, but I'm at work so that makes it even worse! Haha, keep it up!
    | Posted on 2007-02-09 00:00:00 | by black_beauty18 | [ Reply to This ]


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