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    dots Submission Name: diving into the unknowndots
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    Author: Amanda Lynn
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 332/193/56
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsdiving into the unknowndots
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    I can feel you,
    like candlelight
    on my skin,
    flickering about,
    touching me
    so intensely.
    warming me
    from the inside out,
    sultry sweetness,
    dancing enticingly,
    moving gently,
    with each breath,
    gazing intently,
    upon every cleft,
    sighing contently,
    no restrictions left,
    claiming every part,
    making it your own,
    starting with my heart,
    diving into the unknown.




    Submitted on 2007-02-09 14:35:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i gotta be honest this is a great poem. and its hot. i thought it was increadable and the imagery was great.

    gazing intently,
    upon every cleft,
    sighing contently,
    no restrictions left,

    thats such a great feeling and you captured it beautifully.
    | Posted on 2007-05-07 00:00:00 | by jonny b | [ Reply to This ]
      you a such a gifted writer, this piece has such a great flow, plus you yearn for the truest love which i find beautiful
    | Posted on 2007-02-22 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very well written, flowed very well and great choice of words.

    "I can feel you,
    like candlelight
    on my skin,
    flickering about,
    touching me
    so intensely."

    I really like the beging

    well hope to hear from ya and keep up the good work.

    Max
    Aka
    Lil'Mix
    | Posted on 2007-02-09 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
      This read was quite nice.
    It flowed well and your word choice was really nice. I enjoy the theme, too.

    This part's my favorite:
    sultry sweetness,
    dancing enticingly,
    moving gently,
    with each breath,
    | Posted on 2007-02-09 00:00:00 | by wovenwords | [ Reply to This ]


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