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    Author: Thurm
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    the mental strain
    on my brain
    from the pain you've caused
    anger similar to a tiger
    from an unchained broken heart
    was always true from the start
    should've known one day
    everything would turn to dust
    and you would break my heart
    no longer connected
    by mind body and soul
    sold ya soul
    to a career that no one even knows
    how far you'll make it
    with this time that your taking away from this love
    thats slowly but surely
    flying away like a dove
    flying away flying away like our trust
    flying away like us




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