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    dots Submission Name: Tears fall, I learndots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTears fall, I learndots
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    Life is as unpredictable
    as the fall of the trail of a teardrop,
    sculpting a river of lost dreams
    on a sallow cheek.
    The taste of salt,
    trigger memories of
    bitter sweet learnings,
    unfolding the past
    like uncrumpling old newspaper.
    Smooth out the wrinkles
    and rewrite the page.




    Submitted on 2007-02-09 15:40:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What an interesting concept and so nicely told with delightful imagery. thank you for a splendid read.
    Donald
    | Posted on 2007-02-10 00:00:00 | by siradrian | [ Reply to This ]


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