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    dots Submission Name: My Waterfalldots
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    Author: Mr.Ordinary
    ASL Info:    21/M/Navy
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 64/102/41
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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       i wrote this 2 years ago but i still love it because it is so playful. and yet a true dream


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    dotsMy Waterfalldots
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    My waterfall flows up, not down
    No one near it can wear a frown

    It just fills people full of happiness
    When they see a wonder such as this

    Stand above it, see the magic below
    How it works I do not know

    But this I know, told by some
    This waterfall is purely fun

    To my waterfall a artist once came
    She spilled some paint and left a stain

    Now my waterfall is pink
    It really makes you stop and think

    First of all how can this waterfall flow up?
    Will seeing it bring good luck?

    Oh please, please come and see
    My waterfall for the love of me




    Submitted on 2007-02-09 17:20:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this. :) Makes me want to illustrate it for a childrens poem.


    To my waterfall a artist once came
    She spilled some paint and left a stain


    My fav line.
    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2011-08-10 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this, were you talking about a real waterfall or was it a metaphor?
    | Posted on 2007-11-23 00:00:00 | by Arieslove | [ Reply to This ]
      nice plz comment on my poems
    | Posted on 2007-02-12 00:00:00 | by DonkeyMan | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a neat poem, it sounds fairly optimistic and flows well in most parts.
    | Posted on 2007-02-11 00:00:00 | by kathleenbrennan | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a neat poem, it sounds fairly optimistic and flows well in most parts.
    | Posted on 2007-02-11 00:00:00 | by kathleenbrennan | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a neat poem, it sounds fairly optimistic and flows well in most parts.
    | Posted on 2007-02-11 00:00:00 | by kathleenbrennan | [ Reply to This ]


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